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Old 10-27-2010, 02:18 AM   #4
nomesque
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Wellll... based on the one example, which isn't good to go on. I can see the 'stylistic' point, but my personal opinion would be that he's maybe not using them effectively.

I'd write it more like this:

"She was the one that had let them down with her rush to publish. Her need for recognition. Her desire for revenge against Daddy. She let them all down and they would all suffer."
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