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Originally Posted by Williamlk
Richard, yanked back and forth by the wind, his body, rocking violently from the tiny pieces of rubble relentlessly smashing into him.
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This sentence has a subject and a subordinate clause, but no main verb at all. It is not a complete sentence. (You could make it into one by putting a verb like "was" after the word "Richard".) Also, the comma after "his body" serves no useful purpose.
I don't mean to be pedantic, but grammar is the writer's "toolbox" and it's absolutely vital to be able to write in grammatically correct English. It doesn't matter how good the story is if it's not written correctly.