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Originally Posted by Williamlk
With the wind howling, the dust shifting and the debris flying, she could barely make out his form. Richard was caught in the inferno of nature’s rage. Grasping onto a tree, she knew she was screaming, but no sound could be heard against the tumultuous chaos surrounding them.
It seemed they were the only two who survived, and it appeared she may be the only one left shortly. Richard was being pulled back and forth by the wind. His body, rocking violently from the rubble relentlessly smashing into him.
They were only just beginning to regain consciousness from their drug induced slumber, and now this!
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Probably not, for the bolded reasons (and especially that exclamation point!). I'm also a little unclear on the state of things. I read about wind, then it says "inferno", implying fire, which doesn't really seem to go together in my mind. Could be my short-coming there, but I had troubles picturing the scene (which is really how I read, by imaging the scene, so any hiccups really disrupt my reading).