Thread: Would you keep reading?
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Old 08-30-2010, 03:54 PM   #3
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Originally Posted by Elfwreck View Post
Starting in the middle of a crisis is a nice hook, but I wouldn't continue reading; three grammatical errors (one serious), passive voice, and lack of a clear POV tell me I'm not likely to enjoy reading the book, no matter how compelling I'd find the events & characters.
I have not fully edited it yet, but I appreciate the feedback.
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