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Old 08-01-2010, 11:33 AM   #9
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The Amazon reviews are interesting-- all of the positive reviews are by people who have never reviewed anything else on Amazon while the one negative by someone who has reviewed lots of things-- and the negative one is pretty damning:
I read the sample, and within a few pages, noted several annoying homophones - principal for principle, bazaar for bizarre, and more. The author wrote in vernacular for his uneducated characters, and it's poorly punctuated and annoying.

Capitalization is another issue. When you aim a Colt at someone, it should be capitalized, as you are pointing a firearm produced by Colt Arms. When you aim a colt at someone, you might possibly be sending a young horse in their direction.

The general's aide is quite probably a mother hen, though in that scene, yes, he is indeed a wet hen. In most usage, a wet hen is upset, while this aide is merely drenched.

I gave up before completing the entire sample. I wanted to like the story very much, as I enjoy this type of fiction, but I just can't take the overall sloppiness.
Gotta give the author one thing, though-- he really rocks the top hat!

http://www.authorsden.com/visit/auth...uthorid=128714
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