I just read your story, "The Touch of Isis," and thoroughly enjoyed it.
VERY, VERY POSITIVE:
I think your writing is first rate, and would love to read (translate that into "Purchase") a novel from you.
Your dialogue is mainly very, very good (to my ear).
Your writing flows and the story moves along very briskly.
HELPFUL CRITICAL COMMENTS:
I thought the plot line for the story needed more of a backstory for us to better understand the motivation from the characters. I see this story as affording an excellent "Introduction" to a novel.
I thought the time division at the end of the story to be very awkward and 'cutesy,' [and not really necessary], and that it watered down the body of the story.
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Thank you for allowing me to read this.
I'm going to download the rest of your work just as soon as I finish my cup of coffee.
Don