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Old 02-03-2010, 01:15 PM   #1
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Book Trailer: The First Light Chronicles Omnibus

So, after retaining the rights to the video, music and taking the time to edit, etc... I'm finished the first version of a new book trailer.

Now I'm looking for opinions, and I'd like to borrow your eyes for about 1.30 minutes.

Take a look and tell me what you think, please.
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Old 02-04-2010, 06:15 PM   #2
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Very nice visuals and almost like how I imagined Freeground to be. However, the VO needs work. It's partly the script's cheeseyness and the voice quality is pretty bad (maybe due to compression?). Kind of sounds like it was recorded in a small bathroom while the guy was on the toilet.

Maybe shorten the hyperspace/star whizzing by part and extend the beginning animation a bit?
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Wow, very cool!

The visuals are terrific. I agree that the voiceover sounds a bit muffled.

I think the 4 review snippets coming in from all sides of the screen provide a very striking effect --very well done -- it might be cool to follow this up by combining the three shots that follow ("The Origin of the Spinward Fringe Series", "Now available on Ebook", "For free") into one shot similar to that shot (or, have the first two shots -- "The Origin of the Spinward Fringe Series", "Now available on Ebook" -- come in as one shot and then "For free" come in on the same shot a couple of seconds later if you want to really emphasize the free element.).

Anyway, great job!
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One thing I would suggest is a little bit more dramatic spacing between your phrases. The sentences seem to sound a little bit rushed, and run into each other without sufficient pauses.
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