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Old 05-24-2013, 09:25 AM   #1
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title issues

Here's the blurb:

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"I'm not a baby!"
"Prove it!"
A child leaves the safety of the Garden of the Morning and begins exploring the Gardens of Growing Up.

The Bridge of Seven Stones is a story about losing teeth, and growing up. An alternative to the Tooth Fairy story, it recognizes the losses of familiar ways and things, and shows how each new stage leads to new and wonderful discoveries. About 10 pages.
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I've been told that Bridge of Seven Stones sounds too adult. The alternate title I used was The Tooth Troll, but that sounds too comic for the tone of the story, and really the trolls are only a minor part of it, and I'm not sure I want to stress that. The key thing is, this is a "coming of age" story for kids moving into Kindergarten or from K'garten to first grade and who are nervous about this whole "growing up" thing.

If you want to read the whole story to help me find a good title, pm me with your email address, and I'll be happy to send it to you.
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Old 05-24-2013, 10:16 AM   #2
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"I'm not a baby!"

Could work as a title?
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Old 05-24-2013, 10:21 AM   #3
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On a similar note, so could (perhaps): "Proving It", "Garden of Morning", "Leaving the Garden" (or "Leaving the Garden of Morning"), "Losing Teeth".
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Old 05-24-2013, 10:37 AM   #4
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The cover image will (I hope) be of a Japanese-type bridge with sparkly fairy lights on it.

*sigh* I really am in love with Bridge of Seven Stones as a title (even though the story really only goes through four of the stones, then lumps the others into a bigger whole).

the intent is that the protagonist travels across a succession of bridges to newer, larger gardens, so really it's the bridges that count.

and it's not one bridge but a succession of them, so Bridge of 7 Stones isn't all that accurate.

To quote the King in "The King And I", is a puzzlement.
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Old 05-24-2013, 12:38 PM   #5
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Would simply "Stone Bridges" be any better? (Or "A Rocky Adventure" )
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Old 05-24-2013, 12:49 PM   #6
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How about The Tooth Garden? not totally accurate, though - you lose a tooth as you go between each garden.

or, hmmm... It could just be The Gardens of Growing Up, which is accurate, but maybe it's too long?
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If I have something like "The Tooth Garden: a story about growing up" do you think that people will expect sex ed kinds of things?
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I don't particular like the "tooth" titles - unless this one is a little scary. But then I've never liked going to the dentist, so it could be just me.

I don't have a problem with long titles, but "The Gardens of Growing Up" sounds a little patronising to me (good for parents maybe but not so much for kids, or that's how it strikes me). Maybe try scanning the early and late passages of your story and see if anything stands out there that you could use - reusing some part of the text as the title seems to work well with some short stories.
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Old 05-24-2013, 03:24 PM   #9
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Maybe The Gardens of Growing Up? I agree, I think I'll drop the whole tooth bit for the title.
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How about "bridge through life"?
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Talking to a friend, who also knows the Waldorf Education crowd, we've pretty much settled on The Seventh Garden, which is short, and which fits the story line pretty well.

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Talking to a friend, who also knows the Waldorf Education crowd, we've pretty much settled on The Seventh Garden, which is short, and which fits the story line pretty well.

Thanks, all!
I like it.
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drat - title taken

(this is a new thread because it's for a different book than my last title question thread was)

I can't use Dragons and Dreams for my fairy tale collection - the title is taken by a Jane Yolen SF/f collection.

Unless I can think of something better, it looks like I'm back to A Princess for Tea and Other Stories - but I'm afraid that that will ghettoize the book as being for girls only, and I have it on good opinion that at least one 10 year old boy likes the stories.

There are currently 6 stories in the collection:

Princess for Tea
Grumpy Dragon
Sunflower
The Dark
Third Precious Thing
Child of Promise

The go roughly from sily to serious, and mostly in age-appropriateness order, except that Sunflower is for a younger crowd but I want to put Princess for Tea first because it's a stronger story and I want people to see it in the Look Inside feature.

Any suggestions?

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Delete issue. Yolen's collection seems to be out of print, so it should be OK to use the title, especially if I subtitle it "Bedtime Stories" to further distinguish from her collection.

I just don't want to step on anybody's toes.

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How about Dreams and Dragons? Just reverse the Dragons and Dreams in Janet Yolen's title and you will avoid having an identical title to hers.
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