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Freeshadow: I hope this doesn't offend you because I'm only trying to help. Replace the period after novel with a comma, delete the floating hyphen that follows it, replace the word trough with through and add the possessive to victims so that it appears as victim's. Then your submission will be perfect. I'd also specify what it is at the beginning of the sentence. Fair copy: Quote:
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10-01-2013, 08:59 AM | #123 |
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Oh, Ok. That's fine. -- Thanks.
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Fits, keep it so.
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10-04-2013, 09:18 AM | #125 |
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You just can't keep down a good fish.
I let Jebidiah Weymarsh into my apartment and told him of the ghastly horror that had seeped up through the floorboards: “Sorry for the fish smell, Weymarsh,” I said by way of introduction, “but the fan above my oven broke last night whilst preparing a fried grouper fillet; however, more troublesome were the ululations – more pronounced last night than the previous night – when a giant fissure opened up in my bedroom and swallowed my wife Zelda, her suitcase, her clothes, my car, her photos and our good china, not to mention my checkbook and credit cards.” Dr. Drib |
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10-04-2013, 09:54 AM | #126 |
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"She had anger in her heart and an unquenchable fire between her legs."
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10-04-2013, 10:33 AM | #127 |
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"""""Recursed again!" howled the witch," the hero said," sang the bard," the evening paper said," confided the barman.
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10-06-2013, 12:13 PM | #129 |
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Heh, heh. I did think of ending mine with 'confided the witch' rather than the barman, but it didn't read as well.
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10-06-2013, 12:18 PM | #130 |
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Welcome, dear reader, to the first chapter of our real-time novelisation, "They Went To The Stars", in which our intrepid heroes launch their generation ship, Lazarus.
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10-06-2013, 12:22 PM | #131 |
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"Cursive!" cursed the witch, "How in hell am I supposed to read this cursed curse when that cursed wizard had to write it in his cursed illegible cursive!"
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And so, we now come to our second chapter, a truly marvelous chapter in which Dorothy The Midget marries Mister Hippo, but first we must talk about how to prevent unwanted pregnancies and a safe way to use condoms.
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"He had the weight of the world on his shoulders and a Tom Waits CD in the jukebox"
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He was so terrifying that all the bullets I shot at his heart ran and hid behind the mantle.
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