Does this blurb sound okay? - Page 2

mr ploppy · 12-15-2011, 10:48 AM

Proto-image here:

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I'm thinking of having the hard men bit at the top, then a short synopsis, then the granny bit. But I probably need to work on the synopsis a bit more.

mr ploppy · 12-15-2011, 11:30 AM

Would calling them mean motorcycling muthas make them sound a bit gay? Obvously I would need to change Lynn's description too because it would clash with mama.

ApK · 12-15-2011, 11:35 AM

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Originally Posted by mr ploppy

Would calling them mean motorcycling muthas make them sound a bit gay?

Judging by the shows on BBC America, I assumed that all British entertainment was required be a bit gay.

What?

Gudy · 12-15-2011, 02:08 PM

If you care enough about the blurb to spend money on getting it right, I'll refer you to MeiLin Miranda's Blurb Doctor. She's apparently getting good reviews for the work she's doing, e.g. over on kindleboards.com.

mr ploppy · 12-19-2011, 01:20 PM

Revised version. Better or worse? Still not sure whether to mention Simon the sex offender or not.

They are hard, motorcycle riding men.
She is a single parent working the night shift at a petrol station.
Together they battle through hordes of flesh eating ghouls to claim the ultimate prize.

When civilisation comes to an end, the Warhogs motorcycle gang are too busy partying to notice. But after their weekend of drink and drugs fuelled debauchery is over they find themselves in a world gone mad. Never having had anything but contempt for the law in their previous life, they embrace their new situation and are ready to take full advantage of it.

Holing up in a fenced off industrial estate near Shefferham, it’s not long before they turn their thoughts to the nearby Meadowside shopping centre and all the goodies it contains – enough for them to live in complete luxury for the rest of their lives. But with five men and only one woman between them, there are more pressing needs to sort out first.

The Meat Wagon is an old-school British bash-their-heads-in-with-a-baseball-bat zombie story. Definitely not one to let your granny read. Unless your granny is a biker bitch from hell.

30,000 words, 1,900 Kindle locations. Free from DRM restrictions.

wraylewis · 12-21-2011, 10:18 AM

I'm hardly an expert in these things, but I think you nailed it!

VydorScope · 12-21-2011, 10:29 AM

Its much better, not my style of book so it does the job of communicating that to me at least.

mr ploppy · 12-21-2011, 12:01 PM

Someone on Facebook said hard motorcycle men makes it sound like zombie porn, so that's been changed to a brutal outlaw motorcycle gang. Unless there's a market for zombie porn? In which case I could change it to black leather barbarians with their throbbing crotch rockets.

VydorScope · 12-21-2011, 12:06 PM

Okay... zombie porn is not something I have ever before considered nor wish to. lol!!!

ApK · 01-16-2012, 01:14 PM

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Originally Posted by VydorScope

Okay... zombie porn is not something I have ever before considered nor wish to. lol!!!

"The Dead Will Rise."

12-15-2011, 10:48 AM	#16
mr ploppy Feral Underclass Posts: 3,622 Karma: 26821535 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Yorkshire, tha noz Device: 2nd hand paperback	Proto-image here: Code: http://www.imagecabin.com/files/2011/12/15/323963755c6e88cad59cd1859.jpg I'm thinking of having the hard men bit at the top, then a short synopsis, then the granny bit. But I probably need to work on the synopsis a bit more.

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mr ploppy Feral Underclass Posts: 3,622 Karma: 26821535 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Yorkshire, tha noz Device: 2nd hand paperback	Would calling them mean motorcycling muthas make them sound a bit gay? Obvously I would need to change Lynn's description too because it would clash with mama.

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Gudy Wizard Posts: 1,154 Karma: 3252017 Join Date: Jan 2008 Location: Germany Device: Pocketbook Touch Lux (623)	If you care enough about the blurb to spend money on getting it right, I'll refer you to MeiLin Miranda's Blurb Doctor. She's apparently getting good reviews for the work she's doing, e.g. over on kindleboards.com.

12-19-2011, 01:20 PM	#20
mr ploppy Feral Underclass Posts: 3,622 Karma: 26821535 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Yorkshire, tha noz Device: 2nd hand paperback	Revised version. Better or worse? Still not sure whether to mention Simon the sex offender or not. They are hard, motorcycle riding men. She is a single parent working the night shift at a petrol station. Together they battle through hordes of flesh eating ghouls to claim the ultimate prize. When civilisation comes to an end, the Warhogs motorcycle gang are too busy partying to notice. But after their weekend of drink and drugs fuelled debauchery is over they find themselves in a world gone mad. Never having had anything but contempt for the law in their previous life, they embrace their new situation and are ready to take full advantage of it. Holing up in a fenced off industrial estate near Shefferham, it’s not long before they turn their thoughts to the nearby Meadowside shopping centre and all the goodies it contains – enough for them to live in complete luxury for the rest of their lives. But with five men and only one woman between them, there are more pressing needs to sort out first. The Meat Wagon is an old-school British bash-their-heads-in-with-a-baseball-bat zombie story. Definitely not one to let your granny read. Unless your granny is a biker bitch from hell. 30,000 words, 1,900 Kindle locations. Free from DRM restrictions.

12-21-2011, 10:18 AM	#21
wraylewis Enthusiast Posts: 38 Karma: 689100 Join Date: Dec 2011 Location: Oakton, VA Device: Ipad and Kindle	I'm hardly an expert in these things, but I think you nailed it!

12-21-2011, 10:29 AM	#22
VydorScope Wizard Posts: 3,418 Karma: 35207650 Join Date: Jun 2011 Device: iPad	Its much better, not my style of book so it does the job of communicating that to me at least.

12-21-2011, 12:01 PM	#23
mr ploppy Feral Underclass Posts: 3,622 Karma: 26821535 Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: Yorkshire, tha noz Device: 2nd hand paperback	Someone on Facebook said hard motorcycle men makes it sound like zombie porn, so that's been changed to a brutal outlaw motorcycle gang. Unless there's a market for zombie porn? In which case I could change it to black leather barbarians with their throbbing crotch rockets.

12-21-2011, 12:06 PM	#24
VydorScope Wizard Posts: 3,418 Karma: 35207650 Join Date: Jun 2011 Device: iPad	Okay... zombie porn is not something I have ever before considered nor wish to. lol!!!

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