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03-06-2015, 12:46 PM | #1 |
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I'm looking for beta readers for an outlaw biker / alien invasion story
I’m looking for beta readers for this. There’s a few paragraphs from the beginning at the end of this post, so you’ll know what you’re letting yourself in for. I need to do another read through first, but it should be ready to send out in about a week.
It’s 60,000 words, and I’ve restricted myself to mild swearing as a personal challenge (there's a bit in the sample so I've made it into a spoiler). I’m not looking for any praise, just what’s wrong with it, and won’t take anything you say personally. A working knowledge of the 1970s, guns, and motorcycles would be ideal, but anyone who reads action/adventure pulp would be useful. Some help with this description would be useful too: Biker Sluts versus Flying Saucers An outlaw biker story set during the aftermath of an alien invasion in 1970s England. 1970: Aliens arrive on Earth. Seen as a force for good by world leaders and most of Earth’s population, they cure diseases, end all world hunger, and stabilise the environment. 1973: The great purge. 95% of the world’s population are wiped out overnight, leaving behind scattered pockets of survivors to eke out an existence scavenging for food in the ruins of towns and cities. 1978: The mamas and old ladies of Satan’s Bastards MC fight back. This is their story. Sample: Spoiler:
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03-06-2015, 01:04 PM | #2 |
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Looks interesting Mr.Ploppy. Rod Serling used a similar set up for one of his episodes of Twilight Zone. "To Serve Man" was the title.
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It would be interesting to see what your premise for the aliens helping out initially is. i.e. why they do all the good things before they start their invasion.
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03-07-2015, 06:09 AM | #4 |
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Was that the one where they found a recipe book at the end? Or I might be getting mixed up with The Simpsons.
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I haven't seen the episode, but I have read the shorts story. And, yes.
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Interesting... I'd like to beta read it. I'm a writer myself -- worked as a copywriter for more than thirty years, and my own first novel is about to be published (in Dutch, I fear; I'm from Holland).
One small comment: ïn the above fragment, "Tanner" appears to be a main character. Roger Zelazny's novel "Damnation Alley", also an SF-novel about outlaw biking, features a protagonist called "Hell Tanner". Did you choose the name for that reason? If not, perhaps you'd want to change it. Last edited by Karbargenbok; 03-13-2015 at 04:32 PM. |
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The freebee from Wildside this week is an alien invasion story. Odd coincidence.
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