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And work on how to blurb a novel, Oliver. The note above suggests a book with all the originality, style and appeal of a new line in surgical stockings. Neil
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I've just fineshed reading my first eSurgical-Stockings rather tight storyline I thought, and funny enough the eBook is NOT working on my DVT,
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Neil is right. That blurb is atrocious. More suggestions -- your book is way overpriced at $3.99. It's only about 12,000 words according to Smashwords, more of a long "short story" and translates to less than a hour of reading time for the typical reader. -Marcy Addendum: I suspect based on your Smashwords profile that perhaps English isn't your first language. It would explain the blurb, but it still isn't acceptable. I couldn't write anything at all in a language other than my native one, so I realize how hard this must be. However, if you are going to publish a book/story for an English audience it has to be in proper English. You might need to get someone more fluent than you to help with the translation. Last edited by Marcy; 07-09-2010 at 11:34 AM. |
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Before any judgement about my work, I should tell that the content of the book (the whole story) was revised by english professor, as well as I suggest that you read my another work at Smashwords -which is free on the promotion, and it is The Most Beautiful Woman... And, I will check out the blurb again Anyway, thanks Last edited by Oliver Frances; 07-09-2010 at 06:33 PM. |
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I hope you don't mind criticisms. If so, just ignore this post. Again, I'm trying to be helpful, not mean. Plus, I am a bad critiquer. I know that I do or don't like something, but have a hard time saying why. So I'm doing my best to explain what I thought. I did buy and read The Most Beautiful Woman, since you had it on sale for free. My first suggestion is to make it free always. Charging even 99¢ for a 6 page story is a bit much. The story itself is fine, but the actual writing has lost a lot in translation. It doesn't really flow well in English and comes across as stilted in places and just awkward at times. And the descriptions don't flow. I think you need a native English speaker to help you, if your English professor isn't one. Growing up in a language is much different than learning it later on. I admire you for even trying a story in a language other than your native one. I can't even write in my native tongue, forget another one. -Marcy |
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