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Does it need to break? Selfless love could multiple instead of divide. Could have two hearts when your done. |
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04-24-2013, 10:05 PM | #17 |
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Maybe when the two groups have someone from their group both holding onto the amulet in peace something unexpected happens which banishes the threat from their world. Then group 1 no longer needs its powers and group 2 which depends upon it for life returns it to its proper place.
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04-25-2013, 07:40 AM | #18 |
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Been thinking about this some more. Break the amulet, so it seems that everyone will die - the story always has to look hopeless near the end. And then solve the problem with two working together somehow. I know you didn't like the idea of a broken heart, but the symbolism being (perhaps) that you can survive a broken heart however it feels at the time.
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05-01-2013, 03:23 AM | #19 |
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One thought which strikes me: group 2 needs the amulet to stay alive. How come they didn't all die when the amulet was stolen and moved outside their country's boundaries?
I'm afraid that, without finding some way to clone the amulet, you've painted yourself into a corner with this one. |
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Group 2 are made out of stone (they're gargoyles, in fact), and the spell that allows them to live is slow to wear off.
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Have you considered telling the story from the point of view where a grandfather is explaining to his grandson how the gargoyles came to live in the same kingdom as the humans? Maybe the amulet's power is in the fact that it does keep the gargoyles alive and they are bound to serve whomever has it in their possession. Could even be a lead in to a longer story of how it is stolen by someone who wants to overthrow the rightful human leader and set themselves up in his/her place. And of course either the grandson or another boy/girl ends up going on a quest to retrieve it from the thief.
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05-01-2013, 04:30 PM | #22 |
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I think Crich70 has given you a solution to this. They may live far apart in the beginning, but if one group moves to the other's country then both groups get the protection of the amulet.
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05-01-2013, 05:23 PM | #23 |
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So far, at least, the story is told in 3 parts: how the gargoyles came to be, the story of the human kingdom told from their point of view, and then the story continues told from the gargoyles' point of view.
I thought of having the gargoyles move to the human kingdom (and the story did evolve from my kids asking about gargoyles on buildings), but it seems to me that this would be rewarding the theft. the point I wanted to get across, I guess, is that every fairy story of a handsome prince finding the magic amulet or whatever has another point of view. I guess my kids internalized that from other sources, because they're pretty good at the empathy bit. |
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I like the idea of a mutual defense pact between the groups.
It's still kind of rewarding the theft, but you might be able to get around that if the Prince from Group 1, having realized the dire consequences his theft has caused, defies the wishes of his people by returning the amulet to Group 2. Group 2, in gratitude for this selfless act, falls upon Group 1's enemies. |
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That's pretty much the direction I'm going in, Nancy.
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Fairytale logic solution
Amulet transforms group 1 into Gargoyles, group 2 into humans. Group 1 is bound to the amulet for wanting it - group 2 is freed from needing it. |
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