03-20-2014, 10:21 PM | #196 |
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I still have to read your first story, but I expect that it will be almost done by now. As you're the next person on my list, would you prefer I read your second story before the first, as I can probably have more useful input there?
PS: you don't need to go from 1.9 to 2.0. You can just go to 1.10, 1.11... I'd reserve 2.0 for when you decide to rewrite a large part (as I'm doing in mine). Last edited by Katsunami; 03-20-2014 at 10:24 PM. |
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Dave - 1.0
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I've had my first read through "Dave". It flows well, and like "The Day My Father Died" is at its most enjoyable where it illuminates aspects of life in India. I was smiling to myself in recognition during each of the incidents you cover, remembering my own trips on Indian railways and walking around in Indian cities. Here are my first impressions: Spoiler:
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I like limited third person. :-)
http://fictionwriting.about.com/od/g.../g/limited.htm Spoiler:
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You guys are getting ahead of me again. I'm short on time again, but hope to get a look at these new stories in the coming week.
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Dave - v.1-1 now up.
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I've just line-edited "When my Father Died" version 2.0. Tomorrow I'll type up the comments
mrmarlowe: I might have missed it, but haven't you commented on any of the other stories? |
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