User Poetry - Page 82

Namekuseijin · 08-10-2013, 08:57 AM

whoa! never seen this before

I like poetry, but don't usually try in a foreign language... I love haiku, I'll try one in English:

the sound of tires:
the dog goes chasing around
always tirelessly

hope the 5-7-5 metric is right in English. I count 2 for tires, but only 3 for tirelessly. It seems when I pronounce it that "reless" goes in one gulp. is it right?

kennyc · 08-10-2013, 09:05 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by WT Sharpe

...

I like "An Even Trade" better. Less thinking required.

A man after my own heart, those damn intellektual poems make me crazy!

kennyc · 08-10-2013, 09:07 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Namekuseijin

whoa! never seen this before

I like poetry, but don't usually try in a foreign language... I love haiku, I'll try one in English:

the sound of tires:
the dog goes chasing around
always tirelessly

hope the 5-7-5 metric is right in English. I count 2 for tires, but only 3 for tirelessly. It seems when I pronounce it that "reless" goes in one gulp. is it right?

Good job. I love Haiku. Did you see the Maven Mars Haikus?
(mine got ZERO votes.

)

http://lasp.colorado.edu/maven/going...ntest-winners/

Namekuseijin · 08-10-2013, 09:22 AM

wow! NASA loves haikus too!

awesome selection they chose

damn, missed a chance to seed another planet LOL

Namekuseijin · 08-10-2013, 09:51 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Echase

Salt Shaker

The eggs lay dreaming
Stretched out on the pan
The heat of romance
The kiss of butter sweet
Lies
I held it before my eyes
The glass
The soul shaped salt shaker
It looked just like me
Empty

haha, pretty good

kennyc · 08-11-2013, 09:11 AM

.

A Martian Odyssey

There are no clouds in the Martian sky
Curiosity cries at night
when no one hears her silent tears
when no one feels her pain

The sunsets are as thin as the air
no sounds are heard from afar
she cries for Sojourner the oldest here
whose time was cut so short

She wishes to visit him and the others
her brothers and sisters on Mars
but the signal directs, the command is clear
she turns towards Mount Sharp

Kenny A. Chaffin – 8/10/13

Namekuseijin · 08-11-2013, 10:46 AM

sentient and emotional robots.

the Japanese could send Kirobo there for company

kennyc · 08-11-2013, 05:09 PM

(not trying to swamp, just being poetic the last few days....dang muse! I never know)

Old Men Walking

The old-time buddies
walk each day
sharing time and a bit of talk

I’m slightly younger
and walk alone
we exchange greetings of the day

As I come up behind
I edge over to pass
when a bare-chested jogger appears

His perfect pecs
and six-pack abs
on view for all to see

The oldster in the Navy cap
says something to the rest,
which draws guffaws and grins

As I pass I tell them, that I could do that too
except of course it would result
in massive man-boob lust

Kenny A. Chaffin – 8/11/13

Namekuseijin · 08-11-2013, 06:13 PM

muses can be a bitch. nice and I proclaim this already my favorite thread

language and tongue
boy employs on a sunda(e/y):
works an ice-culpture

there you go

Namekuseijin · 08-11-2013, 06:29 PM

what a shame! It's actually "sundae", though the double meaning is intended...

kennyc · 08-11-2013, 06:30 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Namekuseijin

what a shame! It's actually "sundae", though the double meaning is intended...

You can edit...

Namekuseijin · 08-12-2013, 06:23 PM

and yet another, barely haiku at all:

I score yet I lose:
another ball of paper
into the wastebin

.

kennyc · 08-12-2013, 07:00 PM

I like it!

WT Sharpe · 08-12-2013, 07:33 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Namekuseijin

and yet another, barely haiku at all:

I score yet I lose:
another ball of paper
into the wastebin

.

Nice.

Namekuseijin · 08-13-2013, 07:07 PM

thanx

incessant chirp-charp
in all melodic phrases:
I'm all ears

.

08-11-2013, 06:13 PM	#1224
Namekuseijin affordable chipmunk Posts: 1,290 Karma: 9863855 Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Brazil Device: Sony XPeria ZL, Kindle Paperwhite	muses can be a bitch. nice and I proclaim this already my favorite thread language and tongue boy employs on a sunda(e/y): works an ice-culpture there you go Last edited by Namekuseijin; 08-11-2013 at 06:32 PM.

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08-10-2013, 08:57 AM	#1216
Namekuseijin affordable chipmunk Posts: 1,290 Karma: 9863855 Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Brazil Device: Sony XPeria ZL, Kindle Paperwhite	whoa! never seen this before I like poetry, but don't usually try in a foreign language... I love haiku, I'll try one in English: the sound of tires: the dog goes chasing around always tirelessly hope the 5-7-5 metric is right in English. I count 2 for tires, but only 3 for tirelessly. It seems when I pronounce it that "reless" goes in one gulp. is it right?

08-10-2013, 09:22 AM	#1219
Namekuseijin affordable chipmunk Posts: 1,290 Karma: 9863855 Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Brazil Device: Sony XPeria ZL, Kindle Paperwhite	wow! NASA loves haikus too! awesome selection they chose damn, missed a chance to seed another planet LOL

08-11-2013, 09:11 AM	#1221
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,872 Karma: 118716293 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	. A Martian Odyssey There are no clouds in the Martian sky Curiosity cries at night when no one hears her silent tears when no one feels her pain The sunsets are as thin as the air no sounds are heard from afar she cries for Sojourner the oldest here whose time was cut so short She wishes to visit him and the others her brothers and sisters on Mars but the signal directs, the command is clear she turns towards Mount Sharp Kenny A. Chaffin – 8/10/13

08-11-2013, 10:46 AM	#1222
Namekuseijin affordable chipmunk Posts: 1,290 Karma: 9863855 Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Brazil Device: Sony XPeria ZL, Kindle Paperwhite	sentient and emotional robots. the Japanese could send Kirobo there for company

08-11-2013, 05:09 PM	#1223
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,872 Karma: 118716293 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	(not trying to swamp, just being poetic the last few days....dang muse! I never know) Old Men Walking The old-time buddies walk each day sharing time and a bit of talk I’m slightly younger and walk alone we exchange greetings of the day As I come up behind I edge over to pass when a bare-chested jogger appears His perfect pecs and six-pack abs on view for all to see The oldster in the Navy cap says something to the rest, which draws guffaws and grins As I pass I tell them, that I could do that too except of course it would result in massive man-boob lust Kenny A. Chaffin – 8/11/13

08-11-2013, 06:29 PM	#1225
Namekuseijin affordable chipmunk Posts: 1,290 Karma: 9863855 Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Brazil Device: Sony XPeria ZL, Kindle Paperwhite	what a shame! It's actually "sundae", though the double meaning is intended...

08-12-2013, 06:23 PM	#1227
Namekuseijin affordable chipmunk Posts: 1,290 Karma: 9863855 Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Brazil Device: Sony XPeria ZL, Kindle Paperwhite	and yet another, barely haiku at all: I score yet I lose: another ball of paper into the wastebin .

08-12-2013, 07:00 PM	#1228
kennyc The Dank Side of the Moon Posts: 35,872 Karma: 118716293 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire	I like it!

08-13-2013, 07:07 PM	#1230
Namekuseijin affordable chipmunk Posts: 1,290 Karma: 9863855 Join Date: Feb 2011 Location: Brazil Device: Sony XPeria ZL, Kindle Paperwhite	thanx incessant chirp-charp in all melodic phrases: I'm all ears .

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