The FIRST PARAGRAPH from your novel or short story

[Jayne]

The club named Daimio sat just within the city limits. The border lot displayed a vast assortment of vehicles. Celic raced across the pavement and glided through the double doors. Once inside, he located a dark corner for his continued search. The spacious one-story structure overflowed with patrons. Dancers, clad in long purple robes of silk, cruised around the room dipping and grinding to an alternative beat. The vampire noted the activities with a casual scan. His singular objective, the man he chased inside, needed to be found.

Vadas is a vampire novel
It will be released in April by Wild Child Publishing
It has several plots.
Witches seeking his bite
Witches seeking to help him
A young man out for revenge
Deception
Creatures
A ex-girlfriend who craves his return to her arms.

[TMS]

"Two men watched from the shadows as a lone, very well dressed man untied his yacht from the dock and turned toward the helm. The two men crept quietly through the misty morning air to another waiting boat as the lone man started his yacht's engine and slowly backed away from the dock. He headed the yacht out of the harbor through the gloomy haze. His shadows quickly and quietly boarded the other boat."

Originally Posted by Dr. Drib

What genre? adventure/suspense
Novel/short story? novel
Plot? A wealthy banker's daughter and her tutor are kidnapped, and the banker is the victim of an attempted murder, all due to the machinations of the bank where he works which is trying to get him to turn over to them a very damaging video that could undermine public confidence in the entire financial system.
Character(s) Justin Knight, Michaela Knight, and Lizzie Kohn are the main characters
Setting? 2008-2009 financial crisis

[hogleg]

Genre: post-apocalyptic fiction
novel
Plot: John "Jack" Neiland is swept away as the end of the world comes, and then goes, and he finds that things aren't quite like the movies he's seen or games hes played.
Characters: Jack, his mentally imbalanced friend Ben "Crazy-legs" Lucas, the devout and headstrong Marie, Jack's agoraphobic brother Doug, and Jack's fearless terrier, as well as a strong supporting cast.
Setting: Post Nuke mid-America
Scene: An introduction to Jack.

When the end of the world came, it was in part what everyone had expected.

"And on this, one of the shortest days of the year, temperatures continue to plummet into record-setting territory," the forecaster, a middle-aged man with ruddy cheeks and hair that looked like plastic announced through the tinny speakers of the Zenith television that was strapped to a stand and bolted to the wall. Jack Nieland looked at the steam rising from the bowl of soup that sat before him, and poked at it with mild curiosity. It was true the soup was warm, and he wasn’t, but he was starting to wonder if something in it was still perhaps alive. Off behind him sat the blue plastic salad bar, which boasted yellowing lettuce, along with at least two different types of fruit, some home-made potato salad, Club crackers, shredded cheese that looked slightly slimy, as if it had seen better days, and imitation bacon bits.

[jaxx6166]

@hogleg -

I broke MR and can't quote your quote for some reason....but I am in love with PA stories. I want more, it's like a drug.

My only suggestion for it would be some tightening and tweaks here and there. The prose is a bit purple and tell-y (that's a word now. Yes. I made it up.)

I would suggest an almost ZOOM IN type style of everything. Personally, I try to make every word count and only use as much description as neccessary to get the point across or the image in the head. I like to keep things a bit briefer and let the reader draw their own picture.