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But, in general, while I really do appreciate the quick, free edits that you and meera gave me, I think the entire thread has been sidetracked. This was supposed to be a thread about title troubles, after all. |
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I have the same tendency to insert commas at what seem to be pause points, but it is not the correct usage of a comma. Such use needs to be weeded out, if necessary reworking the text to achieve the desired aim with clarity. That said, I don't consider myself an expert, you would be much better off finding a real editor and listening to them.
A poorly received preview is not going to encourage anyone to go ahead and buy the whole thing. (It didn't convince me.) Very few readers leave reviews, good or bad. I don't know if any ever leave reviews after reading just the preview, I've never seen it. I expect that most of those that get as far as the preview and don't like what they find will just move on - it's what I would have done had I not been discussing this with you here. (Also note that many readers will have less knowledge of spelling and grammar than you do, they may sense something wrong but may not have the knowledge to explain it to you.) As for whether my assessments are fair ... You may have heard the saying: "the customer is always right". That goes double for readers. Which does not necessarily mean that they are always correct, just that they are always right. They are entitled to their opinion, and with your book out in the open they are entitled (even expected) to share that opinion. That makes it fair. I am normally quite reticent about giving such critiques (I'm too aware of my own faults), but your refusal to admit to actual errors seemed to require a response. As meeera indicated, and I reiterate for my part, this feedback has been well intentioned. It began gentle but got stronger the more you resisted the idea that there might be real problems to be addressed. Confidence can be a good thing, being blinkered is generally not (unless you're a horse with a job to do). Yes, we have gotten off track from discussing titles. I'd like to think this has been helpful to you, beyond the handful of typos you accepted. |
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I respect your viewpoint and will happily make the obvious changes such as the plural issue and the apostrophe issues, but I stand by everything else. Thank you, though, for giving me a lot to think about. - David |
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07-20-2015, 08:52 PM | #34 |
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What you need to understand is that when you join "the world of self-publishing" you have taken on a second job, you are now a writer and a publisher. Writers write. Publishers publish. You are ignoring your second job.
There is nothing stopping you from writing what you want and and uploading it. Lots of people do that. It's much easier, and much less work. But this is how self-published books have gained a reputation for being of a lesser quality than traditionally published books, a reputation that those of us who want to be taken seriously have been trying to turn around. ... You win some, you lose some. Last edited by gmw; 07-20-2015 at 08:55 PM. |
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I have no problem with constructive criticism, but you definitely crossed the line with your latest post. To accuse me of lowering the quality of ebooks without even reading what you're talking about is just wrong. |
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Before you get too upset about the level of respect shown in my posts, I would ask you how I should interpret the following quote your previous post:
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"...I purposely ignored some grammar rules in order to help mold the story that I wanted it to be."
Cormac McCarthy mostly gets away with this but I still give his books crap for it. When your prose is at his level perhaps you'll be entitled to bend the language. Until then it is just a sign of poor craftsmanship. I am reminded of a line from Bull Durham -- "Your shower shoes have fungus on them. You'll never make it to the bigs with fungus on your shower shoes. Think classy, you'll be classy. Win twenty in the show, you can let the fungus grow back on your shower shoes and the press'll think you're colorful. Until you win twenty in the show, however, it means you're a slob." |
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It's rough around the edges, but I couldn't help feeling sympathy for the boy.
The sentence and paragraph structure confused me at times. It will take a patient reader to come to grips with this and the grammar may irritate some people. It's difficult for a reader to distinguish between style and error. Where do you draw the line? If you're going to be unconventional you might be limiting your readership in this regard, whereas editing and refinement will give you a better chance at success. |
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I had a story to tell, and when push came to shove, I thought that this style would best tell the story. I realize it might anger some folks, cause some folks to stop reading, and maybe even give me some poor reviews in the future (last I checked, I had only one three-star review), but I made the decision to do it, and I am not going to back down from the decision (besides, obviously, changing typos, which are unacceptable). Thank you for your thoughts. They are much appreciated. - David |
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There is nothing in the preview to suggest that the mistakes are deliberate (especially when they have been compounded with actual mistakes), so there has been little to separate your story from others that are uploaded without editing. McCarthy's The Road has been referenced here, but in that the departure from convention is clear and consistent, making it an obviously deliberate choice. This is what you are missing. Your mistakes look like mistakes, not choices. It doesn't have to be like that. You object to my comments based on the fact that I have only read the preview and that they emphasise the technical. The two go hand-in-hand. Technical comments apply even to short passages of text, and they are much less subjective. Improve the technical aspects of your story and you will improve how the story is received by the reader. To quote Jane Austen (an author that may have benefited from her editor), from Pride and Prejudice: "Excuse my interference—it was kindly meant." |
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I usually start with a title (or lede line.)
Unfortunately, I often stop there, too. :-( Anythewho... I do think you need to settle on something before publishing, and then leave it alone. At worst, after a decently long period observing sales and comments, you could always 'reissue' with a new cover and a new title as many books do (like the ones that are turned into movies....) and a notation that says "originally published as..." If you are self-editing, you at least have to put your finished manuscript away for while so it's not fresh in your mind and then re-read it. THAT should be the time when a particularly evocative phrase or image will stand out to you as a good title. ApK p.s. in reading some of your responses here, I feel compelled to point out that you solicited advice on how to encourage readership of this particular work of yours on a public Internet forum. I don't see anything particularly offensive or disrespectful in the responses. If you disagree, and whether anyone read the whole work or not is irrelevant. They see what any prospective reader would see and are telling you what it communicates to them. Whether you see those comments as constructive or not, in these conditions you might want to limit any reply to something like "Thank you for your opinion" and leave it at that. Last edited by ApK; 07-24-2015 at 11:15 AM. |
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