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Old 08-18-2016, 12:05 AM   #1321
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Title: Haiku By The Numbers
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I can count to five
And I can count to seven
I can write Haiku

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Old 08-19-2016, 05:39 AM   #1322
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Title: Haiku By The Numbers
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I can count to five
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I can write Haiku

(Copyright © 2016 Kevin A. Lyons)
The fact that it's a poem containing 17 syllables is not, in itself, sufficient to form a haiku, cromag (and, indeed, most modern Japanese haiku no longer have 17 syllables). The key definition of a haiku is the juxtaposition of two different ideas with a "cutting word" between them. I would suggest, therefore, that your composition, although it has undoubtedly has great artistic merit, is not a haiku.
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Old 08-19-2016, 11:52 AM   #1323
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The fact that it's a poem containing 17 syllables is not, in itself, sufficient to form a haiku, cromag (and, indeed, most modern Japanese haiku no longer have 17 syllables). The key definition of a haiku is the juxtaposition of two different ideas with a "cutting word" between them. I would suggest, therefore, that your composition, although it has undoubtedly has great artistic merit, is not a haiku.
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Old 08-19-2016, 12:04 PM   #1324
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Old 08-19-2016, 12:45 PM   #1325
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Excellent. A proper haiku! Even has the desirable seasonal reference
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Reading many words.
But is this stuff poetry?
Sometimes I wonder.

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Old 08-21-2016, 01:02 AM   #1328
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My august efforts
Have failed, like seeds sown in snow --
My words don't Haiku.
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Old 08-21-2016, 03:42 AM   #1329
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Words on a page.
Seventeen syllables? Yes.
But not a haiku.
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we are a Gathering of fools
we have given the reins
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