08-18-2016, 12:05 AM | #1321 |
Surfin the alpha waves ~~
Posts: 24,475
Karma: 459220161
Join Date: Dec 2010
Location: New Jersey
Device: Jetbook Lite & Mini, Nook STR, Kobo, Hanvon N516, Kindle 2, Androids
|
Title: Haiku By The Numbers
--------------------------------- I can count to five And I can count to seven I can write Haiku (Copyright © 2016 Kevin A. Lyons) Last edited by cromag; 08-18-2016 at 02:58 AM. Reason: Added the title, etc. |
08-19-2016, 05:39 AM | #1322 |
eBook Enthusiast
Posts: 85,544
Karma: 93383043
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: UK
Device: Kindle Oasis 2, iPad Pro 10.5", iPhone 6
|
The fact that it's a poem containing 17 syllables is not, in itself, sufficient to form a haiku, cromag (and, indeed, most modern Japanese haiku no longer have 17 syllables). The key definition of a haiku is the juxtaposition of two different ideas with a "cutting word" between them. I would suggest, therefore, that your composition, although it has undoubtedly has great artistic merit, is not a haiku.
|
Advert | |
|
08-19-2016, 11:52 AM | #1323 | |
Grand Sorcerer
Posts: 11,470
Karma: 13095790
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: Grass Valley, CA
Device: EB 1150, EZ Reader, Literati, iPad 2 & Air 2, iPhone 7
|
Quote:
That elusive C Pythagoras I hate thee C keep way from me. Dale |
|
08-19-2016, 12:04 PM | #1324 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
Harry T came round
He stomped and moped and declaimed Summer is over |
08-19-2016, 12:45 PM | #1325 |
eBook Enthusiast
Posts: 85,544
Karma: 93383043
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: UK
Device: Kindle Oasis 2, iPad Pro 10.5", iPhone 6
|
Excellent. A proper haiku! Even has the desirable seasonal reference
|
Advert | |
|
08-19-2016, 12:46 PM | #1326 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
|
08-19-2016, 12:54 PM | #1327 |
eBook Enthusiast
Posts: 85,544
Karma: 93383043
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: UK
Device: Kindle Oasis 2, iPad Pro 10.5", iPhone 6
|
Reading many words.
But is this stuff poetry? Sometimes I wonder. Last edited by HarryT; 08-19-2016 at 01:02 PM. |
08-21-2016, 01:02 AM | #1328 |
Surfin the alpha waves ~~
Posts: 24,475
Karma: 459220161
Join Date: Dec 2010
Location: New Jersey
Device: Jetbook Lite & Mini, Nook STR, Kobo, Hanvon N516, Kindle 2, Androids
|
My august efforts
Have failed, like seeds sown in snow -- My words don't Haiku. |
08-21-2016, 03:42 AM | #1329 |
eBook Enthusiast
Posts: 85,544
Karma: 93383043
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: UK
Device: Kindle Oasis 2, iPad Pro 10.5", iPhone 6
|
Words on a page.
Seventeen syllables? Yes. But not a haiku. |
08-21-2016, 08:48 AM | #1330 |
Bah, humbug!
Posts: 39,073
Karma: 157049943
Join Date: Jun 2009
Location: Chesapeake, VA, USA
Device: Kindle Oasis, iPad Pro, & a Samsung Galaxy S9.
|
Sixteen.
|
08-23-2016, 01:51 PM | #1331 |
Grand Sorcerer
Posts: 11,470
Karma: 13095790
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: Grass Valley, CA
Device: EB 1150, EZ Reader, Literati, iPad 2 & Air 2, iPhone 7
|
|
08-23-2016, 05:28 PM | #1332 |
Bah, humbug!
Posts: 39,073
Karma: 157049943
Join Date: Jun 2009
Location: Chesapeake, VA, USA
Device: Kindle Oasis, iPad Pro, & a Samsung Galaxy S9.
|
|
08-24-2016, 05:00 PM | #1333 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
.
When Someone gets Sick You worry they may die and they do. Kenny A. Chaffin – 8/24/2016 |
08-24-2016, 05:01 PM | #1334 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
3 x 3
|
11-09-2016, 07:12 AM | #1335 |
The Dank Side of the Moon
Posts: 35,872
Karma: 118716293
Join Date: Sep 2009
Location: Denver, CO
Device: Kindle2; Kindle Fire
|
The Morning After
America is at a Crossroads we are a Gathering of fools we have given the reins of power to a madman. Kenny A. Chaffin – 11/9/2016 |
Tags |
poetry, squirrelku |
|
Similar Threads | ||||
Thread | Thread Starter | Forum | Replies | Last Post |
Poetry Tuesday? | Stitchawl | Lounge | 5 | 10-06-2009 07:46 AM |
Got POETRY? | Dr. Drib | Writers' Corner | 36 | 04-02-2009 11:18 AM |
Poetry recommendations? | ficbot | Reading Recommendations | 1 | 03-14-2009 12:19 PM |
Unutterably Silly Not User Poetry | Dr. Drib | Lounge | 7 | 11-16-2008 12:57 PM |
Poetry by committee | GeoffC | Lounge | 34 | 06-06-2008 07:13 PM |