User Poetry - Page 79

SeaKing · 11-09-2012, 10:11 AM

I take it that no one is going to compare my effort to a Taylor Swift song about lost love?

kennyc · 11-14-2012, 06:40 PM

(a quick one from today, hot off the presses)

Moonstruck

Four point five billion years ago
Theia struck the Earth

Molten magma swirled to space
twisting and twirling about

Two glowing orbs circled each other
like gunfighters under the sun

Locked in synchronous orbit
they cooled and waited on man

Who gathered Moon rocks and found them to be
exactly the stuff of Earth

So rather than cheese, it must be pie
for the Moon is made of crust

Kenny A. Chaffin - 11/14/2012

WT Sharpe · 11-15-2012, 04:46 PM

That's a really nice one, Kenny. It's got everything: Poetry, science, and humor!

kennyc · 11-15-2012, 04:47 PM

Thanks Tom.

and Cosmic-Scale Destructive Violence!

cromag · 11-15-2012, 09:13 PM

And pie!

kennyc · 11-16-2012, 08:30 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by cromag

And pie!

kennyc · 11-18-2012, 12:13 PM

Death Be Not Proud

Death be not proud
for you have not bested me

I’ve looked into your eyes
and watched you slink away

we both know one day
you will win

but for today
it is I

Kenny A. Chaffin – 7/15/2012

Dr. Drib · 11-18-2012, 04:15 PM

I just read your poem and recalled the memoir by John Gunter, in which he writes lovingly about his son who died of a brain tumor, and with the son's full knowledge that death would eventually claim his life.

This is where I first encountered the famous poem, "Death Be Not Proud,"by John Donne.

Don

kennyc · 11-18-2012, 04:21 PM

Thanks Don! I just today read a poem in the latest Best American Poetry 2012 by Steve Orlen titled "Where Do We Go After We Die" which was written by him, knowing he only had a short time to live.

Oh and as far as the title, I knew it seemed familiar when I wrote it, but did not put it together with the John Donne poem until much later....I'm considering retitling it...may or may not....

Dr. Drib · 11-18-2012, 07:02 PM

I would suggest that if your title captures the essence of what you're saying, then it needn't be changed. Of course, that's your decision...

"Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light."

-- Dylan Thomas

Don

WT Sharpe · 11-19-2012, 02:21 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kennyc

Death Be Not Proud ... Kenny A. Chaffin – 7/15/2012

Nice one, Kenny.

I don't know what kind of a mood I was in when I wrote this a quarter of a century ago, but I present it without comment. It's a song, really. One that I'm rather pleased with the piano part. I'll have to record it someday.

Life, Be Not Proud / W.T. Sharpe, 1987

Life, be not proud.
One waking moment, then we sleep
And life shall be no more Life, thou shalt go down to the deep.

Jesus is dead.
I wish you'd get this through your head.
If he could be here right now, He'd agree with what I've said.

Oh, how I wish that I could make you see -
But then, where would you be?
You'd be like me.

Oh, how I wish that I could make you see -
But then, where would you be?

Oh, how I wish that I could make you see Death, Thou art King,
And of Thy praises I will sing.
Other gods come and go, But you forever rule all things.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dr. Drib

"Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rave at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light."

-- Dylan Thomas

I believe one of our members uses that in his signature.

frahse · 11-19-2012, 02:29 AM

I think that legally titles can't be copyrighted, but as a practical matter, it makes sense to separate out our works from others.

kennyc · 11-19-2012, 06:17 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by WT Sharpe

Nice one, Kenny.

I don't know what kind of a mood I was in when I wrote this a quarter of a century ago, but I present it without comment. It's a song, really. One that I'm rather pleased with the piano part. I'll have to record it someday.

Life, Be Not Proud / W.T. Sharpe, 1987

Life, be not proud.
One waking moment, then we sleep
And life shall be no more Life, thou shalt go down to the deep.

Jesus is dead.
I wish you'd get this through your head.
If he could be here right now, He'd agree with what I've said.

Oh, how I wish that I could make you see -
But then, where would you be?
You'd be like me.

Oh, how I wish that I could make you see -
But then, where would you be?

Oh, how I wish that I could make you see Death, Thou art King,
And of Thy praises I will sing.
Other gods come and go, But you forever rule all things.

kennyc · 11-22-2012, 08:04 AM

Protoplanet Seeks Stable Orbital Arrangement

It’s a pinball game out here
multiple balls in play

I can’t take it anymore
I need some quiet, some space
some snuggle time in
a single stable relationship

How long must I wait?

Kenny A. Chaffin – 11/22/2012

kennyc · 12-15-2012, 10:47 AM

New Town

Parents
left alone

Presents
left unopened

Birthdays
uncelebrated

Weddings that
will never be

The town, everything
is different now

Kenny A. Chaffin – 12/15/12

(I know it's too early for this, but I had to try)

11-14-2012, 06:40 PM	#1172
kennyc Priorities! Priorties! Posts: 29,927 Karma: 36862314 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Galaxy SIII; Xoom; Kindle Fire	(a quick one from today, hot off the presses) Moonstruck Four point five billion years ago Theia struck the Earth Molten magma swirled to space twisting and twirling about Two glowing orbs circled each other like gunfighters under the sun Locked in synchronous orbit they cooled and waited on man Who gathered Moon rocks and found them to be exactly the stuff of Earth So rather than cheese, it must be pie for the Moon is made of crust Kenny A. Chaffin - 11/14/2012 __________________ Kenny A. Chaffin Art Gallery - Print Gallery - Writing&Poetry "Strive on with Awareness" - Siddhartha Gautama

11-15-2012, 04:46 PM	#1173
WT Sharpe Grand Muckity-Muck Posts: 26,658 Karma: 70641104 Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Chesapeake, VA, USA Device: Kindles: Paperwhite/K-3/Touch, Sony PRS-600, iPod (audio books), iPad1	That's a really nice one, Kenny. It's got everything: Poetry, science, and humor! __________________

11-15-2012, 04:47 PM	#1174
kennyc Priorities! Priorties! Posts: 29,927 Karma: 36862314 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Galaxy SIII; Xoom; Kindle Fire	Thanks Tom. and Cosmic-Scale Destructive Violence! __________________ Kenny A. Chaffin Art Gallery - Print Gallery - Writing&Poetry "Strive on with Awareness" - Siddhartha Gautama Last edited by kennyc; 11-15-2012 at 05:15 PM.

11-15-2012, 09:13 PM	#1175
cromag My own Cosmic Overlord Posts: 1,385 Karma: 2355366 Join Date: Dec 2010 Location: New Jersey Device: Jetbook Lite, Acer Netbook, a new Android and an old Android	And pie! __________________ My first backlist story to be ebooked, free at Smashwords. My second. And my newest.

11-18-2012, 12:13 PM	#1177
kennyc Priorities! Priorties! Posts: 29,927 Karma: 36862314 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Galaxy SIII; Xoom; Kindle Fire	Death Be Not Proud Death be not proud for you have not bested me I’ve looked into your eyes and watched you slink away we both know one day you will win but for today it is I Kenny A. Chaffin – 7/15/2012 __________________ Kenny A. Chaffin Art Gallery - Print Gallery - Writing&Poetry "Strive on with Awareness" - Siddhartha Gautama

11-09-2012, 10:11 AM	#1171
SeaKing Frequent Flier Posts: 1,197 Karma: 2057399391 Join Date: Oct 2011 Device: KB kindle aboard, Galx Tab 7.0 Plus, trying out Droid 1 as mini-tab	I take it that no one is going to compare my effort to a Taylor Swift song about lost love?

11-18-2012, 04:15 PM	#1178
Dr. Drib Grand Sorcerer Posts: 21,600 Karma: 6945377 Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: San Borja (Lima), Peru Device: Pcktbk 360; Kindle Paperwhite (WiFi)/ Fire HD; nook STR & Col; KoboGlo	I just read your poem and recalled the memoir by John Gunter, in which he writes lovingly about his son who died of a brain tumor, and with the son's full knowledge that death would eventually claim his life. This is where I first encountered the famous poem, "Death Be Not Proud,"by John Donne. Don __________________ “How to Write the First 3 Paragraphs of YOUR Indie Novel” - by Max Waxwelp 1) Always write 3 sentences of exposition; 2) now create some dialogue, preferably no more than 2 sentences; and 3) make certain the dialogue is either inane or humorous. Example: “Bob, I did not know you wore yellow suspenders,” Sally remarked. “Gee, Sally, those are not suspenders. I am wearing yellow underwear today,” Bob revealed. The dialogue above will help produce at least 100 more pages of dialogue.

11-18-2012, 04:21 PM	#1179
kennyc Priorities! Priorties! Posts: 29,927 Karma: 36862314 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Galaxy SIII; Xoom; Kindle Fire	Thanks Don! I just today read a poem in the latest Best American Poetry 2012 by Steve Orlen titled "Where Do We Go After We Die" which was written by him, knowing he only had a short time to live. Oh and as far as the title, I knew it seemed familiar when I wrote it, but did not put it together with the John Donne poem until much later....I'm considering retitling it...may or may not.... __________________ Kenny A. Chaffin Art Gallery - Print Gallery - Writing&Poetry "Strive on with Awareness" - Siddhartha Gautama

11-18-2012, 07:02 PM	#1180
Dr. Drib Grand Sorcerer Posts: 21,600 Karma: 6945377 Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: San Borja (Lima), Peru Device: Pcktbk 360; Kindle Paperwhite (WiFi)/ Fire HD; nook STR & Col; KoboGlo	I would suggest that if your title captures the essence of what you're saying, then it needn't be changed. Of course, that's your decision... "Do not go gentle into that good night, Old age should burn and rave at close of day; Rage, rage against the dying of the light." -- Dylan Thomas Don __________________ “How to Write the First 3 Paragraphs of YOUR Indie Novel” - by Max Waxwelp 1) Always write 3 sentences of exposition; 2) now create some dialogue, preferably no more than 2 sentences; and 3) make certain the dialogue is either inane or humorous. Example: “Bob, I did not know you wore yellow suspenders,” Sally remarked. “Gee, Sally, those are not suspenders. I am wearing yellow underwear today,” Bob revealed. The dialogue above will help produce at least 100 more pages of dialogue.

11-19-2012, 02:29 AM	#1182
frahse occasional author Posts: 1,136 Karma: 2014759919 Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: Wandering God's glorious hills, valleys and plains. Device: Kindle3-3G, Archos 43	I think that legally titles can't be copyrighted, but as a practical matter, it makes sense to separate out our works from others. __________________ . Recognized? By Whom? Everyone. - "In The Shadow of Z'Ha'Dum"

11-22-2012, 08:04 AM	#1184
kennyc Priorities! Priorties! Posts: 29,927 Karma: 36862314 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Galaxy SIII; Xoom; Kindle Fire	Protoplanet Seeks Stable Orbital Arrangement It’s a pinball game out here multiple balls in play I can’t take it anymore I need some quiet, some space some snuggle time in a single stable relationship How long must I wait? Kenny A. Chaffin – 11/22/2012 __________________ Kenny A. Chaffin Art Gallery - Print Gallery - Writing&Poetry "Strive on with Awareness" - Siddhartha Gautama

12-15-2012, 10:47 AM	#1185
kennyc Priorities! Priorties! Posts: 29,927 Karma: 36862314 Join Date: Sep 2009 Location: Denver, CO Device: Kindle2; Galaxy SIII; Xoom; Kindle Fire	New Town New Town Parents left alone Presents left unopened Birthdays uncelebrated Weddings that will never be The town, everything is different now Kenny A. Chaffin – 12/15/12 (I know it's too early for this, but I had to try) __________________ Kenny A. Chaffin Art Gallery - Print Gallery - Writing&Poetry "Strive on with Awareness" - Siddhartha Gautama Last edited by kennyc; 12-15-2012 at 10:49 AM.

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