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Old 10-27-2011, 11:43 AM   #1126
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A Perfect Day

This perfect day is quietly born
With orb of gold and azure skies,
The clouds a-blush – a rosy morn;
Sunrays like gentle, kindly eyes
Smile down upon the sleeping Earth
With tenderness at its new birth.

Pearl sunlight deepens steadily
To kiss the silent world below;
And clouds billow spontaneously,
Their dimpled cheeks with gold a-glow
And every leaf reflecting gold
It seems a flashing jewel must hold.

O perfect day, your blaze, your hue
Are brilliant to gaze upon;
And how I crave to cling to you,
To live this moment on and on;
And, as I bask, I am spellbound
By all absence of any sound.

Rapt by the magic of the hour,
Before begins Life’s busy pace,
I hear the bell of a church tower
And other waking sounds take place;
Saddened I am, for these foretell
The breaking of the gentle spell!

Enchanted so by Nature’s art
And grateful too, I turn away
To treasure quietly in my heart
That blissful sight, a newborn day!
Blessèd are such moments in Life,
Gentle moments amid the strife.



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Old 10-27-2011, 11:47 AM   #1127
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Wonderful Graham!
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Old 10-27-2011, 11:48 AM   #1128
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Thanks Kenny --- over to you... (no pressure then !).
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Old 10-27-2011, 12:00 PM   #1129
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Old 10-27-2011, 12:08 PM   #1130
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A nice one Graham ! a blaze of colour within each line ....
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Old 10-28-2011, 06:53 AM   #1131
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Thanks for the inspiration guys. Here's one from me - hot off the presses.



Lives

My mortal face
I see in the mirror
contemplating me

Mirror lives it seems
are cleaner behind
unbroken glass

Might-have-beens
and alternate endings
there at the edge of the light


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Old 10-28-2011, 06:54 AM   #1132
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Old 10-28-2011, 07:21 AM   #1133
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Old 10-28-2011, 08:57 AM   #1134
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Thumbs up Your "Mirror" poem

I like it Kenny -- deep and introspective.

Thanks for posting; we'll breathe new vigour into this baby yet !!
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Old 10-28-2011, 09:29 AM   #1135
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Rebellion

Part I

The Rising

the boys - their fathers, Lairds - their men,
they came from glens across the land
they left behind their lands, their farms,
their kine, their bairns, their wives, to join
their Prince; he sailed from distant lands,
a stranger - he - unknown to most,
in summer came, to western shores,
his grandpa’s crown he sought, and brought
such hope to highland clans they flocked
to him and marched in hope that he
would guide them on, to victory;
he came with pledge of arms, of gold,
of men to swell the ranks; of plans
so bold they thought it could ring true;
the Chiefs recalled the olden days
when Stuarts tried before, and failed;
they gathered round, to hear his plea,
he asked they join with him to win
a crown by rights was his alone;
the Prince cajoled and won them round;
a banner raised of red and white,
their symbol blessed, a cause they hoped
was true by word of God and Right
of Kings to rule the Chiefs of Clans.

as summer aged they marched and claimed
the land for him, (or most of it);
they crowned him regent for his pa,
whilst aid and arms and gold arrived
from France as pledged; to east and south
they marched and sought and fought and won
against the flow, they beat the reds
who could not cope and broke their line
against the highland charge of clans
who fought to boost their rights to own
their land; they sallied forth beyond
the wall the Romans' built to keep
the ancient tribes at bay; he thought
his grandpa’s crown was his by Right
of Kings Divine; beyond the wall
they fought and won against the odds;
and marched on South; until the lords
lost hope; the place they reached was close
to London town where panic thrived
in face of hordes of men, they thought.
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Old 10-31-2011, 07:56 AM   #1140
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Goeff I love this!!

I do have a couple of suggestions. Two words stopped me in my tracks as I read.

"grandpa" and "pa"

now maybe it's just me, but those two words don't seem to fit with the tone/style/wording of the poem to me. Perhaps "forefathers" and "father" ??

In any case, this poem tells a tale and spins a mood! Very well done!
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