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Old 05-28-2011, 12:59 PM   #1081
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Remebering

Wrote a short poem this morning in honor of those who have served.

Remembering

So young,
So full of life.
Their dreams would have to wait.
They took up arms when called.
They vowed to protect the innocent.
They promised to return.
They never looked back.

For God, Country, Flag and Family,
they marched off.
They filled the depots with excitement and awe,
Many had never left home.
They did not shirk a duty.
They embraced it with the gusto of youth.

The training was hard,
but they nary complained.
They had been called and would not fail.
Righteousness and justice would be served.

Steamers, transports, and planes departed
to destinations foreign and unknown.
Did they tremble? No.
Did they fear the unknown? No.
Their mission was for freedom from oppression.
Their youth would bring order to the world.
It was time to right wrongs.
It was time to free the down-trodden.

Belleau Wood, Flanders, Bastogne, Guadalcanal.
The names are so strange yet not a complaint is filed.
Normandy, Tarawa, Iwo Jima.
With gusto and grit they fought on.
Caen, Kabul, Baghdad, Tunisia, Metz and Arnhem
They fought on.

Too many friends were dying or maimed.
The sound of shells and bullets were frightening.
Never knowing when one might pass struck no fear.
The mission must be accomplished.
They fought on.
Okinawa, Burma, Bunker Hill, and Charleston.
Saigon, The Iron Triangle, Kason The endless Deltas.
The message the same.
Right the wrongs and don't stop til the deed is done.

How many have died? Too many!
How many have been freed? Not enough!
How much longer? Til the job is done.
They fought on. Freedom will reign.

Tokyo, Berlin, Rome, The Somme.
They fought, they bleed and died,
All in the name of freedom.

The smoke has cleared.
The losses are tallied.
The camps are empty.
White crosses mark the path of youth lost.
The survivors wonder why?
Why did Joe and Bill die so young?
Why did I live?
Why me?

For Freedom.
To remember the past.
To remind generations to come the price of liberty.
The thought provides minor comfort.
They survey the battlefields and remember.
The long cold nights,
The days filled with rain,
Endless guard duty,
Mess kits filled with mush.
A smile creeps across a grizzled hardened face,
Freedom, that is why we came,
Liberty, is why we fought.
Justice has been served.

A last salute to the fallen but not forgotten.
The men and women who have given all.
The veterans of the United States Military.
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Old 06-04-2011, 04:30 AM   #1082
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Trying to get back into song writing. I think I've finished the lyrics of one of my songs. It's not the same as poetry because it's harder to get a feel for the rhythm etc.. but for what it's worth:

Break the Spell

Intro
Hello,
Can you hear me now?
I've fallen down the well
Of disappointment.

Hey,
Can you see me here?
I'm lost inside the fog
Of my own apathy.

Aux 1
If only you could break the spell,
If only you could make me swell
With passion.

Verse 1
Drifting through a dream that never ends,
I walk alone,
Awake in slumber,
Protected by the walls that I defend,
Safe and numb,
A silent pistol.

Aux 2
If only you could read my mind,
If only you could hope to find
My trigger.

Chorus
Feel me now,
I'll fire the skies
'Til all the blood rains down,
To be lost inside your seas.

Hear me now,
I'll scream the words
I thought I'd never hear,
Until my voice is hoarse,
My eyes are tears.

If only you could break the spell.

Verse 2
I track each day like scratches on a wall,
Alone and cold,
In my cell I linger,
Waiting for the anti-christ to call,
To steal my soul,
And drag me under.

Aux 3
If only you could set me free,
If only you could find the key,
And free me.

Chorus
Feel me now,
I'll fire the skies
'Til all the blood rains down,
To be lost inside your seas.

Hear me now,
I'll scream the words
I thought I'd never hear,
Until my voice is hoarse,
My eyes are tears.

If only you could break the spell.

Regards
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Old 06-06-2011, 05:20 PM   #1083
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Trying to get back into song writing. I think I've finished the lyrics of one of my songs. It's not the same as poetry because it's harder to get a feel for the rhythm etc.. but for what it's worth:

Break the Spell

Intro
Hello,
Can you hear me now?
I've fallen down the well
Of disappointment.

Hey,
Can you see me here?
I'm lost inside the fog
Of my own apathy.

Aux 1
If only you could break the spell,
If only you could make me swell
With passion.

Verse 1
Drifting through a dream that never ends,
I walk alone,
Awake in slumber,
Protected by the walls that I defend,
Safe and numb,
A silent pistol.

Aux 2
If only you could read my mind,
If only you could hope to find
My trigger.

Chorus
Feel me now,
I'll fire the skies
'Til all the blood rains down,
To be lost inside your seas.

Hear me now,
I'll scream the words
I thought I'd never hear,
Until my voice is hoarse,
My eyes are tears.

If only you could break the spell.

Verse 2
I track each day like scratches on a wall,
Alone and cold,
In my cell I linger,
Waiting for the anti-christ to call,
To steal my soul,
And drag me under.

Aux 3
If only you could set me free,
If only you could find the key,
And free me.

Chorus
Feel me now,
I'll fire the skies
'Til all the blood rains down,
To be lost inside your seas.

Hear me now,
I'll scream the words
I thought I'd never hear,
Until my voice is hoarse,
My eyes are tears.

If only you could break the spell.

Regards
Caleb
Ooooo. I think I'll use that as my personal mantra.
It fits so perfectly.
Good writing!
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Old 06-07-2011, 10:51 AM   #1084
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Hello, All.

I'm so glad to see that this thread continues to produce such excellent written content from all of the participants. Y'all are really talented.

@Geoff Sleep Well!

I am sitting here with goosepimples going up and down my body after reading your piece. GOOD GOD ALMIGHTY!! I'm not sure I want to go to sleep tonight!

What an absolutely exquisitely written and purposed piece! Your word imagery is the best I've read in ages, Geoff. I am so impressed with this piece.

The flow is just uneven enough (that's a good thing, mind...) to add to the building excitement / anticipation / horror of the piece while keeping the eye moving ahead -- almost on its own not waiting to fulling read the first word before jumping to the next.

In the third stanza you bring the piece to its climax and, a shattering climax it is. I can feel myself lying in that bed drenched in sweat with my heart beating wildly.

Excellent, excellent piece! Thank you for sharing it.


@jdawson59 Remembering

It took me quite a few minutes to read, re-read and re-read again your piece and then, quite a few minutes more before I could gather my thoughts to write these comments to you.

You have written a piece that could be placed amongst all the names of the soldiers, sailors, marines and airmen it honors. Beautiful and inspiring are two words that immediately come to mind.

You've not only written a fitting eulogy for the fallen but a memorial that will withstand the ages.

On behalf of myself, my father and all my other family members who have served and are still serving, thank you for this fitting tribute.


@Caleb Break the Spell

Let me tell you, Caleb, I want a copy of this once you've put it to music. Beautifully written and an excellent story. It reminds me of something Pink Floyd would have written.

Your flow is great; your word imagery grabbing. Very well written and a great set of lyrics!


Regards,
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Old 06-10-2011, 02:37 AM   #1085
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On July 20,2009 and laid to rest the one woman I had a lifetime love affair with. I chronilced our story in http://www.amazon.com/Loves-True-Sec...7684074&sr=8-1. This is the poem that opens the book. I hope you enjoy it.

Where Have You Gone?

I remember those care free days,
The girlish happy smile,
The days of high school,
Where only our love mattered.
The bus rides to the games and back,
Trips to the river bridge where our thoughts were one,
The nights filled of passion in the truck,
The moonlight dancing off our sweat covered bodies,
Where have you gone?

Our paths parted in a sea of tears,
The hurt, the pain of the past,
Always just under the surface,
A flash of sunlight, a familiar smile met with pain and hostility.
The smile vanishes, the pain and hurt boil up,
Yet the feelings of love never lost just suppressed,
Where have you gone?

A trip to Tulsa,
A business card in a mailbox,
A phone call two weeks later and the past awakens,
The smile, the pain, the hurt, the memories;
pour in like a raging river out of its' banks.
Is it worth the chance?
Is it worth opening the heart again?
Is it worth another trip to the unknown?
Where have you gone?

The smile is the same,
The feelings of love spring up,
The past is forgotten,
The present and future are all that matter,
Or is it?
Where have you gone?

Seven months of life together,
We laugh, we cry, we love,and we kiss,
Chasing children, sharing their lives,
Strawberry shake in the face,
Movies from a Galaxy long ago,
Steaks, chicken and seasonings,
grilled to perfection with love,
A snowball fight,
A walk in the white soft flakes,
A pause on the sidewalk,
We embrace, kiss long and deep
letting our bodies provide the warmth.
Where have you gone?

The diagnosis, it's back.
Consoling the daughters,
A call to the parents,
A call to the EMT'S,
The present and the future are slipping away.
Where have you gone?

The final hours of life,
Only the sounds of deep painful breathing.
The halls are silent,
Nothing but thoughts for thirty years circle.
The end is closing in,
The cancer is tracking its' deadly course.
Where have you gone?

A warm hand rubs a chest going cold,
The breathing has stopped.
The pain is flowing out of her face.
The Doctor comes in,
The verdict is quiet with compassion,
I'm so sorry, she's gone.
Where have you gone?

Life has come to a stop,
There is nothing that matters anymore.
A never forgotten love has been taken in the prime of life,
A bench in a cemetery with no one else around.

The tears pour uncontrollably,
We cry, “Where have you gone?”
A voice, soft and tender floats down,
“I'm fine.”
“Where have I gone?”
“Where there is no pain, no sadness.
A place where the cancer has healed.
A place where mistakes of the past have been forgiven,
A place where I can look down to watch and help.
A place where only love resides,
The place?
"Heaven, that is where I have gone.”
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Old 06-10-2011, 02:39 AM   #1086
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@ Vanday, Thank you for the kind words. I'm pleased I was able to honor their memories and their service. We owe all of you so much.
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On July 20,2009 and laid to rest the one woman I had a lifetime love affair with. I chronilced our story in http://www.amazon.com/Loves-True-Sec...7684074&sr=8-1. This is the poem that opens the book. I hope you enjoy it.

Where Have You Gone?

I remember those care free days,
The girlish happy smile,
The days of high school,
Where only our love mattered.
The bus rides to the games and back,
Trips to the river bridge where our thoughts were one,
The nights filled of passion in the truck,
The moonlight dancing off our sweat covered bodies,
Where have you gone?

Our paths parted in a sea of tears,
The hurt, the pain of the past,
Always just under the surface,
A flash of sunlight, a familiar smile met with pain and hostility.
The smile vanishes, the pain and hurt boil up,
Yet the feelings of love never lost just suppressed,
Where have you gone?

A trip to Tulsa,
A business card in a mailbox,
A phone call two weeks later and the past awakens,
The smile, the pain, the hurt, the memories;
pour in like a raging river out of its' banks.
Is it worth the chance?
Is it worth opening the heart again?
Is it worth another trip to the unknown?
Where have you gone?

The smile is the same,
The feelings of love spring up,
The past is forgotten,
The present and future are all that matter,
Or is it?
Where have you gone?

Seven months of life together,
We laugh, we cry, we love,and we kiss,
Chasing children, sharing their lives,
Strawberry shake in the face,
Movies from a Galaxy long ago,
Steaks, chicken and seasonings,
grilled to perfection with love,
A snowball fight,
A walk in the white soft flakes,
A pause on the sidewalk,
We embrace, kiss long and deep
letting our bodies provide the warmth.
Where have you gone?

The diagnosis, it's back.
Consoling the daughters,
A call to the parents,
A call to the EMT'S,
The present and the future are slipping away.
Where have you gone?

The final hours of life,
Only the sounds of deep painful breathing.
The halls are silent,
Nothing but thoughts for thirty years circle.
The end is closing in,
The cancer is tracking its' deadly course.
Where have you gone?

A warm hand rubs a chest going cold,
The breathing has stopped.
The pain is flowing out of her face.
The Doctor comes in,
The verdict is quiet with compassion,
I'm so sorry, she's gone.
Where have you gone?

Life has come to a stop,
There is nothing that matters anymore.
A never forgotten love has been taken in the prime of life,
A bench in a cemetery with no one else around.

The tears pour uncontrollably,
We cry, “Where have you gone?”
A voice, soft and tender floats down,
“I'm fine.”
“Where have I gone?”
“Where there is no pain, no sadness.
A place where the cancer has healed.
A place where mistakes of the past have been forgiven,
A place where I can look down to watch and help.
A place where only love resides,
The place?
"Heaven, that is where I have gone.”
My (belated) condolences on your loss jdawson59. Losing a loved one (no matter what the relationship) is never easy and grieving is not something with a definite time limit. It gets better, but it never quite leaves. We lost my dad on May 6 of 1996 and he is still missed.
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On July 20,2009 and laid to rest the one woman I had a lifetime love affair with. I chronilced our story in http://www.amazon.com/Loves-True-Sec...7684074&sr=8-1. This is the poem that opens the book. I hope you enjoy it.

Where Have You Gone?...
Thank you for sharing that well-written, moving, and obviously deeply felt slice of your life.
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Time I

one birth
one living
one dying;
one account
measured in heartbeats.

© 6 June 2011


Time II

a glass up-ended
a scream
one grain of sand
falls
one birth

a glass to drain
a trickle
a flood
aperiodic
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a glass nigh empty
a silhouette plays
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Old 06-13-2011, 09:34 AM   #1090
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@jdawson59 Where Have You Gone?

I am so sorry to read of your loss, my friend.

There is so much I want to write about your piece and I find myself unable to express the emotions it has brought to the surface. You have written a legacy -- a memorial to a life lived, loved and shared. Beautiful!!

I lost a sister in 2001, a sister in 2002 and my mother in 2003 -- all to cancer. Would that we could find a cure for this monster.

Thank you, jdawson59, for this touching and, at times, overwhelming work. I am grateful to you for being to express my feelings with your beautiful words.

Thank you...


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Time I

Words only carry the message and, if the message can be conveyed in a few words, even more so is the power they deliver. Time I delivered on that thought -- succinct yet, rich in its meaning; short yet, powerfully long in its message.

This is a wonderfully written and very meaningful piece.

Time II

If life can ever be summed up in three short stanzas then you have done so in this beautifully written piece. I am so impressed with your writting style, Geoff. It makes me want to dig deep within myself and pull out those thoughts, desires and actions I keep hidden away -- sometimes even from myself.

You're an inspiration, Geoff. Thank you for sharing yourself and your exquisite work.


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Old 06-13-2011, 02:04 PM   #1091
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Thought I'd share another one I wrote about Debbie. I will post another in a couple of weeks about my Dad. Hope you enjoy.

How Many

How many days have passed?
How many tears did we shed?
How many kisses did we share?
How many times did we hold hands?
How many times did I caress your cheeks?
How many times did I gaze in your brown eyes?
How many?

Maybe I will add to a little later, but it truly summed up my feelings at the time.
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Old 06-13-2011, 04:54 PM   #1092
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This one was my first to be published:

Lost in internet

Serving day and night,
in the internet.
Looking for some light,
not to go to bed.

All the friends have gone
many days before.
Leaving you alone,
surfing even more.
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Old 06-18-2011, 10:07 AM   #1093
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In honor of my father RIP 2-15-2006:

DAD?

First impression,
a glove,bat, the backyard,
Jeffrey, you can do it!
Are you sure Dad?

A plane crash, a bandaged hand,
A reassuring smile.
Are you alright Dad?

A 1500 mile move,
Wilmington,De. to Tulsa,Ok.
Baseball or Batman Cards?
Dad?

A train set damaged, a new start.
Can it be fixed Dad?

A new start, a new baseball team,
A new position, pitcher!
Coach, I can't throw, catch or bat.
Can I do this Dad?

Girlfriends, pinball machine,
fire engine red F-100,
A summer with DuPont,
Breakfast with Dad.
Roof needs to be shingled,
"Son, handle it."
Dad?

High school graduation,
pouring concrete, turning cash,
"Son, college calls."
Dad?

Winter break in Tulsa,
A softball game, a dive, batters safe.
A trip to the Er.
"Son, are you hungry?"
"Dad, how about Wendy's?""
Doctor; 3rd degree separation,
Surgery in three days.
Dad?

Another bad break-up,
Father and son to a show.
Winter break, roller skating.
Bad fall.
"Dad, surgery in three days."
"Son, I don't want to know."
Dad?

A wedding.
One son; Justin.
One daughter; Savanna
"What happened to Ashley son?"
Another son; Shawn.
The family is complete.

A new venture
Late nights, long hours.
A voice of assurance.
A loan, tough divorce.
One chapter ends, a new one begins.
Dad?

OSU basketball game,
A great victory ends with a fall.
The lights are slowly dimming
Dad!
Dad?

A visit from friends in an empty room.
Cleaning needs to be done.
"Dad, ask them turn around."
"Okay son, I will."
The conversation continues.
Dad?

A packed auditorium with a sea of gray,
A video dedication.
Final thoughts and reflections.
Rest in peace Dad.
"I am son, I am."
Dad?

A reunification with a lost love.
A night of bewilderment in February
Filled with questions and concerns.
How will it turn out Dad?
"She will be fine son."
Dad?

A cold marble bench,
A shower of tears,
A voice from the heavens.
"Son."
"Dad?"
"Told you she would be alright son."
"Dad, I Love You and miss you."
Son.
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This one was my first to be published:

Lost in internet

Serving day and night,
in the internet.
Looking for some light,
not to go to bed.

All the friends have gone
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Leaving you alone,
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I can feel it.

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