"Aftermath of the Dead" by Gregory Smith, published on ebookmall.com
Avoid. I'm not really sure if the story is good or not because I can't get past the total misuse of basic punctuation that destroys the flow of the narrative. Take this example at the beginning of the second chapter,
"Heading east on Highway 44 Michael Whitman, a courier for Express Delivery." That, Gregory, is not a complete sentence.
And look at this gem: "Everyone is very excited to be through the summer heat, but also feel a sense dread as they know old man winter will arrive shortly."
Yea, I also had "a sense dread" as each page of mangled English passed beneath my gaze so that I gave up on it after 9 pages. Luckily, I only paid $6 on this POS.
Last edited by ZombieEatsYou; 08-08-2010 at 07:25 PM.
Reason: Unlike Mr. Smith, I proofread my text.
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