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Old 10-14-2012, 09:10 AM   #4
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Originally Posted by frahse View Post
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First I love trains so I am predisposed to like this.
Second, I think you are aiming this for the less than 12 set,
but your language is sometimes too adult.

Keep your framework, but work on the language and the expressions.
Hello,
That's the second time I've been told thatSo it must be right.I'm now thinking about "Young Adult" 12 years old and and upwards. Thanks for the comment.If you would like to read the whole piece I have it on my blog site.Please P M/ or e-mail me for details.
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