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Originally Posted by mrscoach
"I really feel bad for him. He's supposed to make a polished public figure from me, but I don't think I polish very well. I'm just a crusty, old, flight jock who says what he wants. Usually gets me in trouble, too."
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Originally Posted by Sao
How about:
"The guy had a shitty job, commanded to take a crusty flight jock and shine him up into clean public figure. I felt bad for him."
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Originally Posted by morriss003
" I really felt bad for him. His job was to take a crusty old flight jock and turn him into a smooth, pristine public figure. "
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Originally Posted by Native
Bill might think feelings, but I don't think he's gonna think about feelings. I would leave out the "I felt …"
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Hmm something mixed in here... maybe:
"The poor kid was just trying to do his job, which was take an crusty old pilot who had a bad habit of speaking his mind and making a polished public figure out of him."
(did not think of casting him as "young" but compared to Bill he probably is)
How does that read?