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Originally Posted by HarryT
Hope you don't mind a bit a friendly criticism: the story itself is well-written, but personally I'd be instantly put off it by the description of it on Feedbooks:
"loose" should be "lose"; there should be a question mark after "faculties" - it's a question; "worth while" should be "worthwhile"; you really shouldn't start a sentence with the word "And" - it is a conjunction.
As the saying goes, you only get one chance to make a first impression, and, had I not looked at the story and discovered that it was indeed well-written, my initial impression would be "do I want to read an author who can't write a grammatically correct description of his own story?"
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Thank you Harry, the comments are much appreciated. That will teach me to rush and not proof the small bits.
And the starting with a conjunction is an interesting debate. I was taught not to at school (quite a while back) but see a wider accetance of it now, although I probably cannot justify my use of it.