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Old 11-11-2011, 08:46 AM   #72
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Thanks for the rewrite, Steve. Just downloaded from your site. I'm one of those who read Lambs Hide, Tigers Seek and never peeped. While it was enjoyable, there were some scenes that didn't quite click. I thought "these characters don't seem very believable in this scene" or, based on what I knew about a character, "why would they do that? Where did that action (or dialogue) come from?"

Let's see how well the rewrite works ...
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