Thread: Does this blurb sound okay?
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Old 12-14-2011, 12:22 PM   #2
Nancy Fulda
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This blurb provides us with a milieu and a big-picture scenario, but it's not giving me an emotional hook. I'm looking for a character to care about, someone with a clear problem and a reason to overcome it, and I'm just not finding it.
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