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Old 09-20-2007, 12:26 PM   #2
Anais9000
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A fun read, and very clean etext; only noted these errors:

and nose—an order of swimming sweetness
and nose—an odor of swimming sweetness

two or three kinds, "that that"
two or three kinds, "and that"

It's likely women— just a pack of women—would have hung together like that!
It's unlikely women—just a pack of women—would have hung together like that!

Alma, black-and-white-and-red, a blazing beauty.
Alima, black-and-white-and-red, a blazing beauty.

seeing me flounder
seeing me founder

every so many
ever so many

But there are you again
But there you are again
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