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Old 08-13-2009, 07:17 PM   #13
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Oh now that is most annoying, I ask for advice, you give it and then tell me to ignore you and write what I want. Sigh.

I'm kidding I love the feedback, I personally liked the use of the present tense for the dream sequences, especially once I thought on it some, however although Im writing for my own kicks I would still like someone else to like/enjoy it, if the present tense puts the reader outside of the story then it doesn't work.

I personally hate it when I find myself pulled out of a narrative due to the writers choices, so I am very greatful for the help
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