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Old 08-13-2009, 06:57 PM   #11
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Originally Posted by ravenlife View Post
Okay it appears that the present tense more annoying to the reader than i thought it would be,

I'll drop it
It generally works better to have only brief bursts for effect rather than long passages. I feel that it really takes away from what you're going for there.
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