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Old 06-10-2009, 02:51 PM   #162
Steven Lyle Jordan
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Originally Posted by pshrynk View Post
I like that sort of thing. A suggestion: add in a bit more confusion to show that the process is fairly traumaitc from a psychologic perspective.
Either that, or throw something really weird in there. "Like: I wasn't really sure I'd died, until the puppy told me."

Actually, don't mind me... you write what you write! It's a great hook opening as it is!
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