Haha. I know. It needs work =)
I'm thinking about taking it and doing a Warbreaker.
For those not familiar, it's what Brandon Sanderson(Mistborn/WoT) did with one of his novels prior to publication. He put it out to the public and edited/fixed things as they came up. Versions 1 through 93294294294324 existed.
I'm glad you guys are reading the excerpt. I'll try to edit as I go along.