looking for feedback on two tweaked ebook (novel) blurbs
Any and all feedback or suggestions will be appreciated. Thanks!
#1) The Find
When thirty-two-year-old cleaning lady Phoebe Jackson finished swabbing the toilets at Players health club, she went out and bought a gun. She’s scared. She’s found a diamond bejeweled Rolex in one of the lockers in the mob-frequented health club and decided to pawn it, which promises to bring in thousands of dollars and is the only way Phoebe will be able to purchase health insurance for her desperately ill daughter. But the watch turns out to be a fake and the mobster whose locker she found it in finds out she took it.
#2) Jamie's Gamble
Jamie Thompson has never done anything wrong. She’s been the perfect daughter in a perfect world. She’s gone to the best schools, known all the right people, done all the right things, and as soon as she graduates college her father’s expecting her to take over the family company. But Jamie is dying inside, and she desperately needs to get out from under the wing of her dominating father. Now she’s got the perfect plan. A friend who lives in a west Texas border town has an accounting job lined up for her, but when Jamie gets there, the job has fallen through. But there is a job open at the Double D Bar & Grill, a rowdy cowboy bar. One thing’s for sure, Jamie’s not going home to her father, and so—broke, on her own for the first time in her life, and sixteen hundred miles from home—she goes for it.
What she wasn’t expecting was falling in love. With a man who might be a murderer.