looking for feedback on three novel blurbs
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#1) Jamie's Gamble
This is twenty-one-year-old Jamie Thompson’s last chance. She desperately needs to get out from under the wing of her dominating father, and this time she has the perfect plan. A college friend who lives in a west Texas border town has an accounting job lined up for her, but when Jamie gets there, the job has fallen through. But there is a job open at the Double D Bar & Grill, a rowdy cowboy bar. One thing’s for sure, Jamie’s not going home to her father, and she’s waitressed before so she knows what to expect, and so—broke, on her own for the first time in her life, and sixteen hundred miles from home—she goes for it.
What she wasn’t expecting was falling in love. With a man who might be a murderer.
#2) Man of God
Reverend John Archer used to be a good man. But the merciless street gangs in his impoverished Chicago neighborhood have made him grow tired of turning the other cheek. So when he witnesses a gang execution of an upstanding fourteen-year-old boy, Archer ignores the ’hood’s unwritten law of ‘do not snitch’ and gives a statement to the police. And in the process makes himself and his family a target.
Now Archer has to choose—obey his God or protect his family.
#3) The Find
Thirty-two-year-old cleaning lady, Phoebe Jackson, is going down fast. She had to quit college when her husband left her. She works a twelve-hour graveyard shift at a mobster-frequented health club. Every month is a struggle just to make rent. Phoebe knows her crisis isn’t the world’s, but when her youngest daughter becomes desperately ill and Phoebe can’t afford health insurance for her that’s the last straw.
That’s why finding a diamond bejeweled Rolex in one of the mobsters’ lockers has her deciding to pawn it.
But the watch is a fake and the mobster finds out she took it.