Originally Posted by John Carroll
I'll be honest. First lines are not my strength. I keep trying to come up with something magical, but it always sounds lame. I believe truly great first lines are a combination of inspiration and luck.
you're wrong here.I like just your style of "direct intro" ,hm..."Blu hared girlfriend" comes first in mind .
Do not understimate yourself,second me first line's destiny is "be read
of the right person in the right moment taking part of the right persons
life period" -seen like this no first line has more than 40% of chances
Good writing and keep doing those your "direct intro's",we know that first
lines are not your strength.