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Old 06-17-2012, 12:33 PM   #41
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Is that a sandwich?
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I don't know which mistake this falls under but I often see an overuse of pronouns when I sample the indie titles in KDP Select.

"He turned left ..." "He walked towards the ..." "He heard ..." "He stopped ..."

"I ... " "I ... " "I ... " "I ... "
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