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Old 10-31-2011, 08:56 AM   #1140
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The Dank Side of the Moon
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Goeff I love this!!

I do have a couple of suggestions. Two words stopped me in my tracks as I read.

"grandpa" and "pa"

now maybe it's just me, but those two words don't seem to fit with the tone/style/wording of the poem to me. Perhaps "forefathers" and "father" ??

In any case, this poem tells a tale and spins a mood! Very well done!
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